The Vampire Agent 2: Newborns

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Areas for Improvement (The Nitty-Gritty) 1. "Telling" Instead of "Showing" This is the chapter's biggest weakness. You are informing the reader of facts instead of letting them experience the story. Telling: "The successful conclusion of that investigation was a major local news event, and it briefly made Cassidy the most renowned police officer in the NYPD." Showing: A reporter from the Post had called her for a week straight. As she walked to the stage, she heard whispers in the Due to the 600 limit you can message me on my gmail for the full feedback kane28533@gmail.com

Hi Hiiragizawa, I’m a casual reader and I really love reading stories. Today, while I was reading, I came across one of your stories and I absolutely loved it. The way you write truly sets you apart from others. I especially liked how beautifully you described each scene it felt so real and vivid I was just wondering, how long have you been doing this amazing work?